Re: Trannsexual film script
You asked for feedback so here you go.
I'm sure there is a market for this type of content; however, the vast majority of persons identifying as TS would find your storyline to be fairly offensive for a variety of different reasons which, if you have been a "long time lover of this forum", you can probably reach on your own.
There are a few key words in your summary that show a pretty large lack of understanding about the basics of identifying as TS... "forced sex change," "hurt" (think about what that implies), etc.
Anyway, I'm not one to squelch creativity in any form but if you're going to want this taken seriously by the TS community, I would say you need to spend some more time at the drawing board. That being said, fiction is fiction for a reason so...
Good luck to you though :)
Re: Trannsexual film script
The forced sex change has been used in Transsexual porn stories forever, and it lends creativity and originality to the story. And when I mean "hurt," I mean literally hurt other people, not perform other forced sex change operations. He holds the entire science department of the university he was fired from hostage, and at the end he makes another villain with powers similar to Tony's, who actually does kill people. Also, Tony accepts his new form and grows to love it by the end, forming a romantic relationship with his roommate Carl. To give it an analogy, I didn't know for sure that I was bisexual until one day it just clicked. Sure, i liked T-Girls, but i thought I was straight with that one exception. With Tony, it's a similar situation. As a guy, he is awkward and out of place, and it isn't until the forced sex change operation that everything clicks for him and he realizes it was what he wanted all the time, especially once he gets his parent's approval. This is a story of acceptance, and It's a superhero story, which is why the forced sex change is even there. It's part of the origin story, it's fantastical, and it's extreme. But it solidifies in Tony's mind that he has to be a hero, and that's why it has to happen that way. It is a central element to the script.
Re: Trannsexual film script
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g@meb0y
The forced sex change has been used in Transsexual porn stories forever, and it lends creativity and originality to the story. And when I mean "hurt," I mean literally hurt other people, not perform other forced sex change operations. He holds the entire science department of the university he was fired from hostage, and at the end he makes another villain with powers similar to Tony's, who actually does kill people. Also, Tony accepts his new form and grows to love it by the end, forming a romantic relationship with his roommate Carl. To give it an analogy, I didn't know for sure that I was bisexual until one day it just clicked. Sure, i liked T-Girls, but i thought I was straight with that one exception. With Tony, it's a similar situation. As a guy, he is awkward and out of place, and it isn't until the forced sex change operation that everything clicks for him and he realizes it was what he wanted all the time, especially once he gets his parent's approval. This is a story of acceptance, and It's a superhero story, which is why the forced sex change is even there. It's part of the origin story, it's fantastical, and it's extreme. But it solidifies in Tony's mind that he has to be a hero, and that's why it has to happen that way. It is a central element to the script.
So, you have much less of an understanding than I originally thought if that is your response.
You are not writing a "Transsexual" comic / story then. You're writing a "forced fem" comic / story. They are completely different and like I said, you will have a difficult time selling this to the TS community as something that is helpful in furthering an accurate portrayal or educating people about it.
Your storyline basically supposes that one can be made "Transsexual" (simply by body modification) and that is a MAJOR flaw right from the get-go.
Writing fiction is fine and dandy but I'm just saying you should be cautious about the terminology you use if you want to be taken seriously.
Re: Trannsexual film script
the biggest "problem" of sorts that i noticed was this one:
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His roommate, CARL, convinces him to become a superhero, which Tony reluctantly agrees too.
if you're familiar with hero-driven storytelling (hero's journey) then you'll probably know that CARL isn't just going to tell TONY to become a superhero. also the "reluctantly agrees to" kinda implied a level of nonchalance on your main characters part. was he, like, considering doing something else?
also- the forced feminzation angle seems a little unnecessary and propels the whole story into something more akin to pornography. why wouldn't the "disgraced professor" just try and kill him? you know- like how most guys operate. does this professor just go around converting his enemies into transsexuals?
i'm not sure what tone you're going for, but if it's supposed to be comedic then i guess it works. if you're trying to make something more serious- then you've lost me
Re: Trannsexual film script
Welcome to the forums!
Force Fem stories are not about a man being forced to be a transsexual. Most force fem stories are about a man being forced to be a crossdresser.
I am guessing you don't know the difference between the two. A transsexual is an individual who feels that he or she was born in the wrong body, and may take various actions such as hormone therapy and surgery to change their sex. A crossdresser is a person who only dresses as the opposite sex for sexual pleasure. Some croessdressers are men who have sex with women. Not all crossdressers are looking for dick.
Re: Trannsexual film script
I see what you're saying, and I can definitely make changes accordingly. I think one thing I can definitely do is further emphasize how he secretly wants to be a transsexual and doesn't fully realize it yet. I already have a few scenes before the change of him failing miserably with his girl friend at the time. I also have a masturbation scene towards the beginning, but I don't say what he is jacking too. I could actually describe it now as some T-Girl porn. I could also throw in some awkward romance bits between him and Carl before the change to further show that he isn't sure about his sexuality. Finally, when he talks with his mom at the end i could have not be as surprised, maybe even put in some flashbacks of him dressing as a girl as a kid, or doing other girly things in his developmental stages of childhood and adolescence. You feedback is definitely appreciated though, because I want this hero to be something T-Girls can look up to, because there aren't any Transsexual superheros at the moment. There are Gay and even lesbian heroes, but no Transsexuals. What do you think? Would you like to read it?
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Welcome to the forums!
Force Fem stories are not about a man being forced to be a transsexual. Most force fem stories are about a man being forced to be a crossdresser.
I am guessing you don't know the difference between the two. A transsexual is an individual who feels that he or she was born in the wrong body, and may take various actions such as hormone therapy and surgery to change their sex. A crossdresser is a person who only dresses as the opposite sex for sexual pleasure. Some croessdressers are men who have sex with women. Not all crossdressers are looking for dick.
I've seen forced fem stories that include surgical enhancements like breast augmentation, waist trimming, permanent makeup, but lifts, etc... And that's the thing is Tony does wind up wanting dick in the end, and we aren't even sure he likes pussy in the first place.
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g@meb0y
I've seen forced fem stories that include surgical enhancements like breast augmentation, waist trimming, permanent makeup, but lifts, etc... And that's the thing is Tony does wind up wanting dick in the end, and we aren't even sure he likes pussy in the first place.
Where did you see movies about men being forced to become transsexuals? What site is this? I've seen alot of TS porn and I know my porn. This I have never heard of or seen. As I have said I have seen forced fem scenes about crossdressers, but not TS women.